Do you realize What you picked up when I said yes

by Becky   Oct 20, 2006


Will you hold me up
will you hold me till the end
take my hand and guide me
guide me to my grave?

you unlocked my mind
filled with silent pleas
and razor sharp kisses
when you asked that question

will you hold me up
will you hold me till the end
take my hand and guide me
guide me to my grave?

secret glees
and murderous looks

once you've opened my book
it won't close till it's every last words have been consumed
by your all to reluctant ears

will you hold me up
will you hold me till the end
take my hand and guide me
guide me to my grave?

you've tuned in
to an unheard frequency
calling to the undead
for a final
everlasting end

walking down the line of mirrors
what do you see?

will you hold me up
will you hold me till the end
take my hand and guide me
guide me to my grave?

I'm the black cat walking across you path
the picture of the dying crow
burned into your mind
that record that never quite ends
I'll be with you forever

will you hold me up
will you hold me till the end
take my hand and guide me
guide me to my grave?

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  • 18 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow, wonderful! Only have one problem though and that is that in some places in could use a little editing but other than that it was great! Keep it up! 5/5

    Innoc3ntStar

  • 18 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    I love the way u repeating some words i felt im singing,, well this was so sad poem. on writing poem we have different style so i think this is ur style to write ur poems and i truly appreciate,, honestly this was great and i really feel the emotion and this is so true.. so keep it up 5/5

    and may god bless u always....

  • 18 years ago

    by awww

    Hmm... it was ok... the meaning was good... i found it unique to put the same stanzas repeatingly... but some people might not like it... so try editing it a bit... dont worry the meaning was there... :p

    ~angel~

  • 18 years ago

    by Letty

    This is a very unique poem. It was also very sad. I really enjoyed reading it. I liked the whole flow of it and the creativity you put into it. There was only one problem that I could see and it was in the fifth stanza.

    it won't close till it's every last words have been consumed

    I think it would have been better if you would have wrote:

    It won't close till every last word has been consumed.

    That's just my oppinon. But other then that I say excellent. You have done a wonderful job. Keep up the good work!
    5/5

    Letty

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Try editing it a bit .
    Other than that, overall, it was well done .
    Good job, hun` .
    ..ღ__MiNDYY

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