Hey. I really like this poem, but personally (and you don't have to say anything I say to heart, because you're the writer and it's your choice: but I thought I'd share my personal opinion with you.) I think you put your main verse in there too many times. It seems like there's so much repitition, that I didn't want to keep reading those lines over again. Don't get me wrong, it's really well written, with alot of metaphorical speaking and I really like that (and that especially) but I think if you took out one or two of your repeated verses, it might seem a little shorter; but still just as well delivered. Anyway, do what you want with it, either way it's a good write :). Keep it up.

Very sad. Well done though; I really liked it. 5/5.

God Bless,
Taylor

Try editing it a bit .
Other than that, overall, it was well done .
Good job, hun` .
..ღ__MiNDYY

This is a very unique poem. It was also very sad. I really enjoyed reading it. I liked the whole flow of it and the creativity you put into it. There was only one problem that I could see and it was in the fifth stanza.

it won't close till it's every last words have been consumed

I think it would have been better if you would have wrote:

It won't close till every last word has been consumed.

That's just my oppinon. But other then that I say excellent. You have done a wonderful job. Keep up the good work!
5/5

Letty

Hmm... it was ok... the meaning was good... i found it unique to put the same stanzas repeatingly... but some people might not like it... so try editing it a bit... dont worry the meaning was there... :p

~angel~

I love the way u repeating some words i felt im singing,, well this was so sad poem. on writing poem we have different style so i think this is ur style to write ur poems and i truly appreciate,, honestly this was great and i really feel the emotion and this is so true.. so keep it up 5/5

and may god bless u always....

Wow, wonderful! Only have one problem though and that is that in some places in could use a little editing but other than that it was great! Keep it up! 5/5

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