Bravo great work keep it up ill have to go read the others now =]

Line four , change can't to cannot .
Line 30 , change til to until .
Those would perfect the flow .. And maybe seperate it in stazas of 4 lines . 5/5

I love all of your poetry.
he ones i read anyways.
:))
this poem in by far my favorite though.
I dont know why, it just is.
dont stop writing, you have some real potential.

And it would be greatly appriciated if you could comment and rate one of my poems.
thanks love!

-jesss.
Btw:: Im putting you in my favorites ;)