I liked it, i think you tried too hard to make things rhyme, the structure was good though, but seemed too forced, use your emotions to make the poem flow.

Great meaning, for sure; but the rhymes seem quite forced and the flow is a little off. Points for uniqueness, though! And, like I said, I really like the meaning. Nice work.

Hmm...This poem didn't really click to me. I had to read some lines over more than others, and it made me frustrated.

All the 'all's kinda made me think "Whoa. I don't need to read the 'all the's anymore." The way you set up the poem was unique, and I give you points for that.

The rhymes seemed a little forced, and I'm not sure if you meant to do this, but you sort of repeated lines...

[All the hims,]
and
[All the "his",]
^^To me, that pretty much meant the same thing. Good try. =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

I think that just about sums up totally what love is. You are right. I doubt i would ever have thought of all the right words to describe love, but you just did it, perfectly. I think that if it was written in a different structure it may have come across better, but still, i like it alot. Well done. =] 5/5

Hmm i think this was ur style! i really appreciate and u write it well, coz this was unique style. great job5/5