I love it! I love the repitition u've used and the rhyme pattern in the last few lines! 5/5 well done!

I like it. Post the entire song as a poem....I would like to read the rest. The Lizard King was a brilliant poet and it was reflected in the music of the doors. Encore!

You can tell it it part music the way the words sing to a beat!

I liked it a lot! keep writing