Smiles [Sedoka]

by Tammie   Oct 21, 2006


Beaming enjoyment
A natural expression
Forming from true happiness

False mask of delight
A deceptive appearance
Hiding behind a facade.

* My first Sedoka, please criticise to help me improve, or tell me what you think, if you will. Thanks. =] *

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The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the same subject from differing perspectives.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is yet another great job a great poet.......

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Cute, I like it and it's different, I hate having to read the same kind of poems over and over again. 5/5 Keep it up!

    Innoc3ntStar

  • 18 years ago

    by ether

    Tammie! This was so cute! Short and sweet! Not many people can write good short poems, but you can! Excellent! Ily 5/5

    jess ~

  • 18 years ago

    by Jax x lyn

    Very beautiful! I love it... Sweet and simple. Yet it explained emotion... Perfect 5/5!
    [*:.heart.broken.:~] xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley Ann

    WOW.. You really do go all out on your poetry. You try to do different forms of poetry rather than regular poetry. I am learning from you. Thanks! :D 5/5

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