Ok I'm not too good at commenting on different styles, however I can relate to the 'real' smile and the fake one we hide behind at times.. I can't say if it's written perfect or not because I am not familiar with Sedoka, but putting the style aside I really liked this poem :] xx

Good poem, short and meaning ful I really like it....GP

WOW.. You really do go all out on your poetry. You try to do different forms of poetry rather than regular poetry. I am learning from you. Thanks! :D 5/5

Very beautiful! I love it... Sweet and simple. Yet it explained emotion... Perfect 5/5!
[*:.heart.broken.:~] xoxo

Tammie! This was so cute! Short and sweet! Not many people can write good short poems, but you can! Excellent! Ily 5/5

jess ~

Cute, I like it and it's different, I hate having to read the same kind of poems over and over again. 5/5 Keep it up!

Innoc3ntStar

This is yet another great job a great poet.......