Ive enjoyed reading this one, though its very deep
every lines makes me ponder.

Tipping over bodied swells
Giving to my heart so shaken
*An emptiness that tells the tale
*Of warmth that winter's taken.
^ this is my fave stanza and the *'d lines are my fave.. so amazing. and sad and beautiful. you're an amazing poet, the only advice i can give is that you should try to step out of your confort zone- which seems to be 4 line stanzas with abab or abcb r/s.. i used to do exactly the same things, and i started otehr kinds like rhyming freeverse, and now i write more that way, its awesome to explore the different styles and such, so give it a try!

Anyhoo-5|5!

x.x:Lauren

Woah. this reminds me of that song "windmills of your mind" by dusty sprinfield. great poem by the way. makes me think. :)