by Vanessa Lea
All I can say is WOW. Great work. You are very talented. Keep it up. |
Wow what a different poem so good and hidden meaning i sometimes find these types of poems hard to understand but you did this softly and perfectly the flow was fantastic i couldnt give any improvements to this keep it up xxx alex xxx (1) |
by Bridgette
Wow.. I really like this. It was a very imaginative idea. The only thing that I saw was that in the last line of the last stanza it reads: |
by Tara Kay
OMG, that was so dark! It was so amazingly written, sent a chill up my spine, i can see straight away you have a talent. well done |
by Stephanie
Ok, first off that was just, wow! It was so darky feely |
Hm. This was pretty good. I always liked the ones that rhyme.. haha, I give it a five alll the way. |
by Robie Lincer
Amazing write!!!! |
by ShaunaMarie
I love this poem, and the vocab that you put into it. It must have taken a while to edit and all of that good stuff. KEEP up the good work. |
That was a great poem. You are a good writer |
by Marina
This is absolutly wonderful!!!! |
by Elynnka
Wonderful! Too bad the flow was off at times or at least it seemed that way to me, anyway I liked it! 5/5 |
by Anonymous
The imagery in this poem was AMAZING! The rhyming scheme was pretty bad hiney, too. The flow was okay; better in some parts than in others. It was still a great poem, let me tell ya. This poem seems sort of like Shakespeare, minus the way his words are. |
by Darien
The imagery in this poem was well written, however the rhymes were a bit forced. You had some creativity with what words you rhymed, and the grand scheme of AABA was very good. Your flow was thrown off at a few places. Just a suggestion, if you keep in mind the amount of syllables per line, keep it the same throughout the stanza, and your flow will be great. Not always but most of the time. |
by Brittany C
I think that this is a great poem. It has a nice rhythm and good word choice. Keep up the good work. |
by Jenni Marie
Wow...I loved this. |
by michael
This is an awsome poem :D you are a great writer ,,, but you probably have experiance with it .. if i can say that :P |
*Was wound and very near entwined* |
by Tricky Daze
It was a different and imaginery requring poem but you did an excellent job on this,it deserves a 5 |
by David
The story it told was wonderful! really brought out how much you can write and wat capabilites you can do! you are a very talented poet. keep writing, well done. |
by Unrequited
I don't know if I can keep reading your poetry, because as I keep reading, I feel so much more emotion drain out of my body. THAT is how much your poems move me. I have no idea how you are able to create such sad, moving, creative stories with your pen, but I just cannot get enough of it. Please... Keep writing!! :) |