Very good poem. I can defiantly

Sorry did finish my last comment so here I can defiantly understand this poem. Keep up the good work.5/5

Much better i really likes this. the beginning was very good. -a warnign im not sure if you meant to do this. but you capitialized many odd words. i'd fix that-unless you meant to.

a few things the second line-is just a repetition of the first basicly. you could simply get rid of it. lol. also. this whole section kinda killed the atmostphere you created in the beginning

Comes and yells at the other girl
Who was to perform
She tries to cheer me
Though Hannah the other Performer
Wanted to stay behind and help
Nikki sent her inside

~this isnt a story. every thing doesnt need to be blatently said. try ussing metaphors and other literary devices to help potray these types for things happening.

try to make it less blunt and more poetic. but good job. =]

x3 Lauren