My secret angel (by graeme)

by graeme   Oct 22, 2006


Oh my secret angel,
God must have sent you,
Your here to bring me happiness,
But my sadness comes from lack of you.

Your presence brings me happiness,
But absence means gloom is due,
I crave your touch and loving,
But loving I receive not from you.

The boy who has your heart,
Is so far from worthy,
You give him oceans of love,
And still he treats you dirty.

You made your mistakes previously,
But guilt shouldn't hold you back,
You do not have a debt to him,
So now you can change track.

Getting together may be wrong,
But once together oh so right,
Our glow will rub off,
As people share in our delight.

I know you doubt my feelings,
And think I'm just pretending,
But when you compliment me,
You start my heart off singing.

My words aren't from a book,
Simply from my heart,
The reason why I tell you,
is because I can't bare to be apart.

My love for you is real,
Six months of anguish,
No longer can I sit in the darkness,
No longer can I let my feelings languish.

Your advice to me was simple,
Let nothing stand in your way,
Your advice I have taken,
And now persistence must stay.

The man to make you happy,
could so easily be me,
but your comfort and security,
you will not risk for me.

I can understand your reasons,
But know that you love me,
so I wish you would accept your feelings,
And please just let us be.

(this is the 1st time i have ever written a poem so im shure its of a low standard but i was inspired by the person i luv alex her poems are magnificent and realy touch me so please leave ur coments)

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  • 18 years ago

    by Christie

    Wow, heartfelt poem... such a trouble ur in right now.. i guess in the end tho its up to her..

    Things will go as planned, this may not mean with u, tho if u love her, u will accept her decision. good luck!!

    keep writing,
    xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    This is such a sweet poem. It actually really good for a first poem. (I remember mine... lol- not even close) I love the first stanza but i think that in the last line it should be one syllable shorter... I think that would sound better. Secondly, the first line in the second stanza is almost the exact thing as the third line in the first stanza... Its just a bit repetitive. Other than that, Wonderful job on your first poem!

    xxEvilAngelxx

  • 18 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    Its very sweet that you were inspired, and for a first poem, its amazing.:)..the rhymings a bit forced but, thats ok and in the first stanza "Oh my secret angel,
    God must have sent you,
    Your hear to bring me happiness,
    But my sadness comes from lack of you" i think you mean "Oh my secret angel,
    God must have sent you,
    YOU'RE HERE to bring me happiness,
    But my sadness comes from lack of you"
    your off to a good start:)

  • 18 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Oh my god graeme you joined my fav site this is where i can relax and now you joined your free to read any of my poems wow i dont suggest it though you might think im a little crazy im with david graeme and i know its hard for you but i am :(

    thisp oem was bloody fantastic tho whod have thoguht you could write poetry well done id give it 5/5 lol xx