Oh my god graeme you joined my fav site this is where i can relax and now you joined your free to read any of my poems wow i dont suggest it though you might think im a little crazy im with david graeme and i know its hard for you but i am :(

thisp oem was bloody fantastic tho whod have thoguht you could write poetry well done id give it 5/5 lol xx

Its very sweet that you were inspired, and for a first poem, its amazing.:)..the rhymings a bit forced but, thats ok and in the first stanza "Oh my secret angel,
God must have sent you,
Your hear to bring me happiness,
But my sadness comes from lack of you" i think you mean "Oh my secret angel,
God must have sent you,
YOU'RE HERE to bring me happiness,
But my sadness comes from lack of you"
your off to a good start:)

This is such a sweet poem. It actually really good for a first poem. (I remember mine... lol- not even close) I love the first stanza but i think that in the last line it should be one syllable shorter... I think that would sound better. Secondly, the first line in the second stanza is almost the exact thing as the third line in the first stanza... Its just a bit repetitive. Other than that, Wonderful job on your first poem!

xxEvilAngelxx

Wow, heartfelt poem... such a trouble ur in right now.. i guess in the end tho its up to her..

Things will go as planned, this may not mean with u, tho if u love her, u will accept her decision. good luck!!

keep writing,
xxx