I hope this hasnt really happend it really got to me this poem this was so sad i hope things are ok with you i didnt notice anything wrong with this one well done xxx alex xxx

Aww you poor thing. =( The loss of someone close is always hard to face. I know how you feel and it's ok to let your emotions out and in the open. I say this because you didn't seem as if you wanted to show your emotions:

[I just want to stop hurting
I don't want to cry
and I wish I'd had the chance
to say my final last goodbye.]

I thought the first part to this poem was better than this one. Mainly because it left the reader wondering about what was going to happen next. The flow was also much better in the other one. Keep it up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha