Emotions

by janelle   Oct 23, 2006


Hurt
pain
sadness
emptiness

four of the main things i feel
Never do they leave me
they fill every part of my body
from head to toe

these feelings
i can Never escape
cant hide
nor can i run

always teasing
messing wit my head
happiness...
i can Never find

time wont heal these feelings
Ive felt them for too long
I'm surrounded by a heap of people
but yet i still feel very alone

how i wish....some one would come and
take these emotions away
and let me feel one day of happiness
and let me feel like I'm loved!

emptiness i find
in each n everyone i look at
they too are trapped in their
worlds of emotions, trying to escape

but like me,
they cant find a way out
trapped in a sea of emotions
is where we're gonna stay

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  • 17 years ago

    by Alysse

    I really liked this one, you can literally fell the emotion you are trying to get across, you captured it very well, but to make it more real you should try not to use n or gonna because using slang can take away from the point you are trying to get across. Just a suggestion.

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarahs death angel

    Well written +) i liked it and can feel the emotion..
    -sda-

  • 18 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    I think the other one was better than this one, but I can sense you were trying to get across your sadness and frustration with how you feel, wishing it would fade away if just for a day. Umm...by the way in your 5th stanza it should be surrounded instead of surround. Hope these thoughts help you! Not trying to be bad critical just the good critical, so you can keep growing as a poet! Keep it up!
    Charisma*

  • 18 years ago

    by Sherisse

    This is a good one!!!!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Aure

    I like it, espacially the ending, it carries a lot of emotion.

    Some personal advice, if you just say to yourself, well these emotions I have, but I have still myself and that's a good thing, so I'll just take a step into the world with a smile on my face, and believe me, the one your looking for will be facinated by your appearance.

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