I like it, espacially the ending, it carries a lot of emotion.

Some personal advice, if you just say to yourself, well these emotions I have, but I have still myself and that's a good thing, so I'll just take a step into the world with a smile on my face, and believe me, the one your looking for will be facinated by your appearance.

This is a good one!!!!!!

I think the other one was better than this one, but I can sense you were trying to get across your sadness and frustration with how you feel, wishing it would fade away if just for a day. Umm...by the way in your 5th stanza it should be surrounded instead of surround. Hope these thoughts help you! Not trying to be bad critical just the good critical, so you can keep growing as a poet! Keep it up!
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Well written +) i liked it and can feel the emotion..
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I really liked this one, you can literally fell the emotion you are trying to get across, you captured it very well, but to make it more real you should try not to use n or gonna because using slang can take away from the point you are trying to get across. Just a suggestion.