Nightmare

I liked this, it was very unique and the imagery you used was fantastic.
I think it could be improved by adding more depth, but apart from that, you did a wonderful job.

I really like this, I loved the short lines and short stanzas. The words used were short and simple yet made the poem seem really intresting. The description was great! Nice job, Keep writing!! xx

Mousie,

Nightmare is a very effective topic. I do not think that you have utilized teh whole platform available to you in this concept.

Flow in terms of both, logical thoguht and language is very choppy. Every stanza stands out like a first line of some thrilling novel... btu fails to provide the depth of expression. The lines create a tinge of a familiar vision to the reader but they have failed in bestowing the horror and tension that the writer feels onto the reader. I liked the ending in terms of logical conception but I feel that they could have been worded better.

All in all... vision, expression and flow can be drastically improved if more thought is put to the concept as to what the writer wants the reader to feel exactly while reading his lines.

Wow... so unique! i love it! its soo creative!!! Keep Up the good work!! I wish i had more to say lol...

xxEvilAngelxx