Spurious Reality

Wowee Natalie. You never seize to amaze me with your poetry. I love it. This one created a vivid picture in my mind, and it was like I could feel the anger.

"Bitter teeth bit two blossomed lips"

^^ Loved those lines.

-Jenna.

I love your word choice, as always.

I think all the words described exactly what you were trying to say, even though you didn't describe something specific, it was easy to see the feelings and emotions you were talking about in your poem.

Thanks for commenting on my poem. =)

Keep writing.

Great job! 5/5

XoXo
Gaby

[High pitched screams broke glass,
Filled with sand from an hourglass.]
^ I felt it didn't work well with "glass" at the end of both lines, it really threw me off because it sounds like you're using the same word.

Awh, wow, Taleee, that was excellent! I missed your work so much. Tehe. It's just so different and unique from everyone elses. Your vocabulary is amazing, it blows me away. Cheer up sweetie, Ily! 5/5