by Choose xX Alex Xx Life Oct 24, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
Another hour, another smile down, |
by Allison
I don't usually like love poems, but this one was good. The sadness laced in the words and it fit. Keep writing. *5/5* |
by Brittany C
Good poem but not your best. One change you could make if you want to is in line 3 of stanza 1 maybe try "Like a heart" instead of "Like the heart" I think it just sounds better but that is just me. 4/5 |
by eXile
Dang, this is really good, 5s |
An emotion conveyed with all of its manifestation , probably some emotion with which all of us identifies and the beauty of ur poem is, u can give a contrast between happiness and sadness. |
..."a strain upon a fragile heart"......Sorrow and sadness and strains such as these are, inherently, profound catalysts for greatly strengthening the fragile heart....your heart has grown stronger already......bet you know what I mean..... |