I know how that feels, but just think about when he is there and how wonderful that is. 5/5

Best Wishes,
Drew

I can totally relate to the feelings and emotions You express in this poem.
Excellently written.. well done 5/5 xx

The concept of the poem was beautiful and I could feel the emotions that you were going through when you wrote it. But the flow of it was a little off. In the beginning of the first stanza I thought that it was going to be a free-verse poem, so that is what I was prepared to read. And then as I read on I realized that it wasn't, but that was still ok. It's just that some of the rhyming seemed a bit forced, but don't get me wrong you did get your message across. And the poem was still beautiful. So I have know other choice but to award you with a 5/5. But next time let the words just flow, close your mind off to the usual rhyming and just go with the flow. I hope that you don't take exception to my comment because I find myself making the same mistakes until someone points them out to me. So keep up the wonderful work.

Letty

Yup, i can definitely relate to this one. i hate when i'm not with my bf, and this describes wat its like pretty accurately.

well done on another wonderful write,
xxx

Hey this poem is brill, i write a poem on the same subject but its no wer near as god as this. oxox

A very emotianal peace of writing. I really like it because of the emotian. Keep it up! xx

I liked this alot, it was very sad yet sweet and your love shines through the words.

..."a strain upon a fragile heart"......Sorrow and sadness and strains such as these are, inherently, profound catalysts for greatly strengthening the fragile heart....your heart has grown stronger already......bet you know what I mean.....

A touching, Shakespeareanesque, write...

An emotion conveyed with all of its manifestation , probably some emotion with which all of us identifies and the beauty of ur poem is, u can give a contrast between happiness and sadness.

Dang, this is really good, 5s

Good poem but not your best. One change you could make if you want to is in line 3 of stanza 1 maybe try "Like a heart" instead of "Like the heart" I think it just sounds better but that is just me. 4/5

I don't usually like love poems, but this one was good. The sadness laced in the words and it fit. Keep writing. *5/5*

Alyson