by xxmichaelxx Oct 24, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
(these tears like rain won't come again |
Great job. My suggestions are review this poem and fix the flow. It was a little off throughout. The appearance of the poem would benefit if you capitalized the first word in each line. Also, try to expand your vocabulary, use less words to say the same thing. (A thesaurus always helps) Keep writing and I know you can improve! =D |