Charity

Lovely. A beautiful message glowing throughout it, too. 5/5.

Wow. This really gives a meaning in life. I loved how you almost quoted the Lord's prayer. It was wonderfully used in this piece. I always like to see how people interpret the Lord's prayer. I somehow find it interesting with all the different ideas people come up with. ^_^

You did a wonderful job with the flow and the rhymes on this. I didn't find that they were cliche at all. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

This is a great poem, I think it's mostly because the message is so deep. Personally, I find life poems so hard to write, I don't know much about life...=)

I like the way you described charity, it was really poetic, wel written and the message was clear. You really described charity as a poet.

Keep writing.

Good job! 5/5

XoXo
Gaby

5/5: I liked the clever, uncliched rhymes as well as the message. Nice job once again.

(If you feel like checking out another of my poems, please do "Emotion". It's one of my oldest ones, but I revised it recently.)

From the point of myviev, so creative penned yet flowed with good message, very interesting!