Hi Honey

i like this poem but wish it were a happy .

i love you
Suda

A good one.it reflects the pain you are going through

I think you should put (this one WILL do) ti help gather sence but other than that i t was fine i think xxx alex xxx

This is such a great poem like always, i luv ur words, so great. 5/5

Awww yes...i know that feeling. a woman in waiting. and at times being let down...many times. but there will be days like this n then days when we no longer have to wait. love how you described how you stayed strong n held back your tears! great job! check out some of my more recent ones when you have time, great job letty!

I love how this is filled with emotion, and the vocabulary is so rich. However it does seem a bit jumpy; a few syncapated words make for good peoms, but it interupts the flow a bit.

The second stanza, the first line ends in "do"
I dont know if you were trying to make it rhyme, but it doesnt really work, it should be does.

Thanks for your awesome critique on those two poems. Theres not enough people you comment like that on here

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I love this poem !!! u express ur pain ooo..thats very beautiful poem !!!!