Guy on the train

by milly   Oct 25, 2006


Hidden under a hat and a somber exterior,
I wonder what you have locked inside,
Happiness? Sadness? Love? Hope?
What do you have to hide?

A scarf tied around your neck,
Many a bracelet encircles your wrist,
Shackles of fashion so casually bind you,
Does society hold you trapped within his fist?

A despairing sigh sits behind your eyes,
Waiting to consume you with troubles and pain,
Why are you so sad, so lost, so desolate?
Why has your sunshine faded to rain?

Where do you travel to on this journey?
I wonder if you're escaping - just running away,
Maybe a new life , a new path awaits you,
Maybe freedom is coming your way.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Dumpstead

    Milly,

    Ah, There's a poem more suited to my taste and oh yeah! it's tasty. He he. ;-]

    That is a good poem, but again I see the lack of integrity in the logical conception of the poem. In the first stanza you wonder what expression he has locked inside and in the third paragraph you notice his dispairing eyes and other things and you decide on sadness. Ah, well isn't it the eyes that you notice of any person first?? Hence, how did you miss the despair in the first stanza if you could recognize it in the third stanza??

    To me, first two stanzas are the best two stanzas in the poem, as they keep the stranger a stranger and derive his qualities by his physical appearance. And that is what I actually expected from the Title and from the flow of the first stanza. But anyway, it does not really tear away the flow and the poem is really good, but I would have liked it it it kept the stanger's feeling completely apart and had you wondering and deriving meaning from hsi physical apeearance only.

  • 18 years ago

    by monika

    Fantastic poem!! really well arranged and flows nicely :) keep it up

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