by xoxShorteexox Oct 26, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Passionate voice calm her to sleep, |
I really liked this.. Again, I don't like non-rhymingness, BUT I loved the message.. It was sweet. Yet, sad. Nice. May I make a suggestion as a friend and critic? To get your poems to flow better, make each line around the same syllables (Spelling). If one line is 7 syllables, make the others 6-8. I hope you don't mind me saying that... Just trying to help. If I was too bold, just tell me. |