Amazingly penned poem! I love how well it paints the images and How well it flows through the first three stanzas. The last line of the third stanza should be split into two lines: A twister arising / from within the dark street. In the last stanza: AJAR is one word and the last line - it fits well but the vocabulary could be expanded more. Wonderful job overall!

xxEvilAngelxx

Scratch that- it flows through all the stanzas not just the first three

=) Keep writing!
xxEvilAngelxx