Beautiful piece JESSY JUST BEAUTIFUL
"Saying goodbye to all her sorrows and pains
Climbing out of the hole, getting back on track.."
i really liek that part dont kno y 5/5 great job keep it up

Wow, this just blew me away! It was so beautiful. This poem had great vocabulary in it and it had a great flow to it. Loved it! 5/5 Keep writing!

Innoc3ntStar

Wow, Jess! You had some really good lines in this poem, and all of them made so much sense. It really got me thinking.

I agree..
"Saying goodbye to all her sorrows and pains
Climbing out of the hole, getting back on track.."

I loved those lines..

WOW JESSY! i can't belive how much talent u have. once again another beatiful write, it contains so much description and emotion, i was picturing it all in my mind! well done.

keep them coming!

sophie:)xo

I am speechless. I love everything about it. The concept of the poem is amazing and i love how you descriped how she was getting out of this terrible time of her life, like a black hole. Also not using such cliche terms, but writing this, for example:

Removing each thorn; finally smelling the petals.

An amazing poem. Keep it up! =] 5/5

Tammie

Hey..

i like ur poem.. i can relate to it.. good job..

can you please rate my poem too..

i just made a new one..

its called.."the real me"

hit me a comment.. coz your opinion counts for me.. youre a great poet.. keep up the gud work..

tc..

Beautifully done .
Just ... wow .
I just love how you ended it .
&&I just love love love:
Discovering light amongst the ghostly black
Saying goodbye to all her sorrows and pains
Climbing out of the hole, getting back on track
That part !
Lovely .
..ღ__MiNDYY

Wow! The description, the imagery. Just wow! This poem left me speechless. Really well written. Keep it up! xx

This is a beautiful, touching poem. I loved the whole rhyming scheme, the flow was brilliant, and the message was wonderful. My favorite stanza was the second stanza. Don't get me wrong I loved the whole poem. It pulled me in and kept me there, but to me the second stanza was completely beautiful, and it held the main part of the message that you conveyed.

Goodness sparkles from her longed for destination
Transparent hands lift her from the clinging evil
Removing each thorn; finally smelling the petals
Throwing all her fears and obsessions into upheaval..

To me this stanza signifies that this women, or girl, is finally coming to terms with herself and realizing that she does have a little bit of good inside of her. Then finally she starts to have faith and God steps in and pulls her out of her misery. I may be wrong, but it's the picture that you painted for me. You are a wonderful poet Jessy and I love reading you work. 5/5 Keep writing wonderful poems like this and I of course will keep reading.

Love
Letty

I like the way it offers hope, and possibly comfort!!

Wow, yet another wonderful written poem by you, I love your work, you are very talented. I was just getting into this poem and then it stoped, I'd really like to see this continued, it is kind of short. Great Job on the flow and structure of the poem. Keep the wonderful work.

Ciao, Joe

Honestly, this poem is not my favorite, but i still like it anyway. It still gets a 5/5, but it didn't really get my attention.. but, again, good use of words.

Ooo. I see why you might have wanted to put this in the life poems. It sums up a lot that happens in life.

The darkness in this was...wow. Lol. I can't even express my feelings enough to tell you how much I liked it. There were just no words lol. And the emotion was great! It was like I knew exactly what was happening, and I was the person. You had great imagery and flow throughout this piece. Wonderful job. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Great choice of words, and how u put them together was amazing... i loved it... keep it up