Comments : My Apologies

  • 18 years ago

    by Jemma

    I like this. It is well written. The rhyming is good and does not appear forced at all.
    Jemma

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    The flow loses a little steam towards the end as the rhyming goes a little askew and personally I find it makes the ending fall a bit flat.
    However, I found the theme and language extremely touching and sad. You have a talent for emotional expression. Keep it up