by twisted reality Oct 27, 2006
category :
Dark, fantasy /
fantasy, mystical
Salty tears drop from her eyes, |
by BloodScars
Sounded like a sex poem at the end ((like him taken her purity and virgintiy)) |
by Rachel RTVW
Scarred for life and after it seems in this one. Very interesting. In a couple places the rhyming seems forced which throws the flow off a bit but overall you did a good job. Especially to be only 14. You'll overcome these minor flaws with experience. I still give you a 5/5. |
by Dark Kitten
Wings as a symbol of innocence and hope, torn away when jaded by life here on earth. It sounds like you were feeling grieved by life and just wished to give in. ^-^ Great read, though. A poem is nothing but words on paper until the poet gives it a soul. Keep doing what you do! |
The first line really hooked me, well the whole first stanza actually and I was interested to see what the poem was about. It was different in a good way to say the least. I always love reading new things with new topics. Excellent job overall and great flow well done 5/5 |
by AnnMarie
For a random poem it is pretty awesome! The reader can feel the emotion, The flow makes it nice to read, and overall it is an excellent poem! Great write Sammy! |