Aww. That's really, really sad. But I like it. You came to school with makeup smeared on your face? [down] awww. Next time, I shall see you, and Hug you. =[[
Anyway, yes, this is really good. You are extremely talented.

Huh i can relate keep ur chin up :) good write

Excellent poem. Very touching, very sad. The ups:

1)There was an ok flow throughout the whole thing. It evened up in the end, and ended rather nicely.
2) The emotion was great. It was so sad, and was seeping with terrific darkness.

The not so good things:

1) The flow was a little rocky, but as I said above, it worked out in the end.
2) The rhymes seemed cliche to me, but that may just be me. Try using words that aren't usually used. You'll see how much people will appreciate your work.
3) The grammar. It sucked if you don't mind me saying that. -_- Grammar to me, is a very key part of poems. If I can't understand a poem, I usually forget it and just give a one liner >.< But I tried reading through here I guess. Lol.

Just keep a few things in mind, and your writing will quickly improve. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

I liked it, the flow could have been better but worked well overall. i liked the structure and wording. well done
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