Nice loving thoughts, but expressed in lines too long. Break them up into more concise parts, don't try to say everything at once. Remember poetry must have rhythm/metre/flow just like music. Use repitition for emphasis not because you have trouble finding a different word. "i" is capitalized.
This will be a very nice write if you work it.

Awwwww this is so sweet!! :D 5/5

Losey might be right , but as long as the words came out from the burnin passion inside no matter how many lines , or lies...

keep et up 6/5