I thought that the message of this poem was very powerful and it obviously contained some raw emotion that was extremely moving. Maybe now that you have the passion and feeling-which are both vital to a good poem-you should try and focus a bit more on the grammar and punctuation to make some of the lines read a bit more smoothly, maybe use a few commas in the middle of lines to make the meaning clearer? Also in places the rhyme seemed slightly forced, for instance the line about wanting to sing...it felt as if you only included this to fit in with the scheme. Please don't think I'm being unnecessarily harsh...I did like the poem and am only suggesting ways for improvement as you asked for honest comments...hope this helps!
much love x

Great poem, and I really can relate. I have felt and still feel these same emotions sometimes...GP