The first verse was the best, the rhyming on that verse was more natural than on the other verses but still good. it took me a few reads of the last verse to understand what it meant but i get it now :D

Creepy... is there a demon or something snatching her soul away? that's what it seems like to me.
very nicely written, but sometimes the flow seemed a little off in my head. but ofcourse i've been told i have a very peculiar way of reading poems... 5/5!!

Sounds like the picture this poem is supposed to paint is in black and white. I dont get the wings soaking up the black paint part but other than that, excellent write. 5/5

Honestly, i kind of found this a bit confusing. The first stanza i could understand, as well as the second. The third i got a bit confused. I can't figure out what the last line or two mean. But other than that i think i get the general idea. Other than being a little confused, which could just simply be my reading, i think its great. Written very well, with a good concept behind it. =]

Tammie

I really like this one. It's very powerful. I definitely enjoyed reading it.

WOW.
I loved this!
I thought it was absoluetly perfect.
5/5

Oh, I wrote one about black paint too! What a coincidence! I thought this was so wonderful and creative, your imagery is outstanding and overall this piece is perfect...much better than mine anyway. Keep up the good work! 5/5

You said you wantedan honest opinion on this one and Darling, honestly, nothing needs to be changed. It had great descriptions and it created a vivid picture in my mind. I especially liked the last line with the description of the black wings; it was amazing. Keep it up.

5/5

-Jenna.

Amazing poem!
I loved it...
the way you described the black paint and all... wow

keep it up!

Definately an original, very powerful and full of emotion... i lked it alot... keep it up i enjoyed it 5/5

Wowee-- Jessy! This was simply amazing.

Your poetry is growing better & better each time I read your work!

You described everything so well in this piece, using the right words, too!

To be honest, I don't think I would change anything, it would ruin the poem! Awesome work! Ily. 5/5

Natalie``

5/5. Great poem. Loved it~ I can`t explain how I erally liked this poem I just can tel you I did!

Very Dark, But very well written, I am not one for dark poems, but you deffenitly know how to write one and make the reader interested. Awesome Job.

Ciao, Joe

Perfect, one way to describe it! What I loved most was the imagery that was painted in my head while I was reading this poem. Very dark poem here hun! Great flow though and wonderful emotions portrayed through this poem. Loved it, keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie

This is absolutely Ah-Mazing!

When the white wings sprout does that symbolize her going to heaven? And then when they soak up the black paint, does it symbolize that heaven absorbs the pain? I loved this poem but what exactly did you want it to mean? Plz tell me, I'd love to know! Definitaly 5/5 though! Keep up the Great work!

xxEvilAngelxx

Wow that was really good i feel the pain in that heart....good poem...rachy

I really loved that.. the dark imagery is so powerful! you paint such a vivid picture! xx

This poem is amazing, it's so vivid etc. Cant wait to read another one. Well done.

I love that

-Abbey