[Away completely through shame built inside,]
This line sounded a little off to me, I think it was because of the "away" at the begginning.

But other than that, it was great! Your vocabulary is very impressive and the way you use it shows skill. I loved this linee!

[Catched underneath skin, almost microscopic,]

I don't know why, but it just really appealed to me and had fantastic imagery. Love your work sweetie! 5/5

Nice. really nice. =]

Innocent Crybaby*

It fe;t more narrative as if it were telling the reader instead of showing the redaer unlike your other poem but this one too had a very nice beat to it and a certain quality that made it sad but not begging ot be sad.

A touching piece very well structured xx

I really like this. It seems to have so much meaning behind it, & i like the way you told the story, with so much emotion. You sure do have a way with words hun. Keep it up. =]

Tammie xo

This was a really good poem sis, and I'm not quite sure who was reading this, because they obviously cannot judge poetry well. Although short, it contained a lot of things. The flow and rhymes were great. You had a lot of detailed imagery, and your vocabulary was nicely spread. Awesome job SMAWCE sis!