"As I walk across this bridge of dreams
Many wonderful things have I seen
Wonderful things that will never be
Because it was only a dream "

What an unexpected ending. I was like aww throught the begining of it but then the ending just shocked me! I like that about the poem. It had a good flow and good word choice. Keep it up! xx

It didn't really flow all that good, and your rhyming was a little forced... in some places it rhymed and in some places it didn't. i liked the idea though. maybe just go back and tweek a few things.

I love this poem.

I enjoyed this, I thought the wording and imagery were amazing.
I found the flow to be off in a couple of places, but apart from that, I really liked it.
I also liked the alternate ending better than the first one.
P.S I didn't get your comment, I think the site stole it o.O

I agree with what some other people said. The flow and rhyming seemed to be a bit off.

Other than that though, I found it really sweet. It's a shame the way it ended, I was shocked!

Good work.

Your rhymes seem very forced. This is not as good as the previous one I read of yours. Please try to revise those rhymes and I think you will have more success. You have very meaningful themes though.