by Wasted Fake Smiles Nov 1, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Darkness surrounding, chocking in the black, |
by sweetiepie18
U r gifted. |
by emmerz
Well it wasnt your best, but i still think you did alright on it. there were some parts where the rhymes seemed kind of.. i dont know, like you could have used some more..mature words for the situation (? i dont know:P) you were talking about. but i do like how you ended it. but the ending line wasnt flowing with the 2nd to last line...other than that, good write |
That is pretty darn good... |
by *Charisma*
A very good poem. Very sad. I've never read one about this, so to me at least, it was original. Good job! |
by DevilWithin
It was kool i liked reading it..i thought towards the end it got a little weak but other wise it good...rachy |