INCREDIBLE! well penned, great rhyme scheme, and perfect flow! I really loeved this poem! I would just suggest capitalizing the first word in every line. Other than that amazing write! Keep it Up! Your on my favorites! I can't wait for your next piece!

xxEvilAngelxx

Maybe some punctuation as well. =D

I lyk the rhyme sceme u used. i think u need to fix up ur gramma a bit but apart from that its great! 5/5. keep it up!

This poem was very nice. I haven't read something quite like this before. It's not too original, but the flow and rhyming makes up for it. I have gotten a good image in my mind. Keep writing great stuff like this!

Wow, great work! i love the way you asked questions all the way through!
Your rhyming was great and didnt seem forced at all!

Im really surprised this is your first poem, its really great!
keep up the great work!

5/5

~Murder.

Time passes, and lives have to change, To distinguish fantasy from reality...... so heartfelt poem, within well express emotions, and though sad but well penned, within the question, The image you potray here, could it really be...? anyway, keep writing, and hope you have a great day, best wishes. bert.~

I liked this...it was so sweet yet sad and filled with emotion.
I thought the flow was off in a little places, but apart from that it was very good!

This poem was good!. it kinda reminds me of how i right my poems but better! so it kinda cool in that wayy! good job.

I loved this poem, the subjectt of it was great too.
It flowed really well too and i like poems that continuously flow so yeh keep it up =]=]

~*~Jen~*~