Hey thank you for the comment I really like your work please keep writing and stay true to yourself. Take care and GOD BLESS

Wow... okaaay.. that was an extremely sad poem.. i love your writting style and the words you chose... great poem!

5/5 !

Very good!! very nice!

Hey,
First fo all thank you for your comment its much appreciated! :)
Now your poem; i rally enjoyed your use of repition, "This is my way of saying goodbye" it was quite effective. But i personally thought you should of had a certain line of the each stanza it comes in. I mean in the first two stanza's, you used the repition on the first line of the stanza, and then the last two you kinda expect it to be on the first line of each stanza but its not...
But eyah i really liked how you ended the poem with again that repition. It was a good way of concluding the poem considering its sunject. I liek this story youve got hidden within your lines, it makes the reader more intrested in reading the poem. It had an ok flow, but my favorite thing about the poem was the deep emotion youve displayed so excellently within your words. Amazing job on that! SO yeah quite a good read. Keep writing! xx

Good good poem..
i know goodbyes suck..
but at least he/she knows that u miss him/her
and he/she knows that u love her :)
especially by writing this. u dont need to be sorry for waiting so long... they can tell in ur mind if u miss them or love them or both...
well
its a good poem :) and keep up the good work

Daemyan

This one is really great...the repetition sounds wonderful in this context and the flow is very nice... it seemed to me that you could be singing it...=)
keep on writing

*isabel*

Awwwsome. he words i love are these

ill always love you darling,
even though i shall die,

realy true and deep. it relates to me good job take care

I liked the repetition in this poem it was written really well. The line was great. the flow was ok but the emotion was really strong and powerful. I think u should capitalize the first letter of each line though just to make it look a little enater. Other then that well done~mel

Wonderful poem. There is one change I would consider making. In the first stanza second line maybe try it with out "when I'm gone" I think that this change would help make that stanza flow better. Other then that this is a very good poem:) 5/5

That sounds so sad its really good

*RATTLEHEAD*

Ohhh this was so sad, and yet so beautifully written at the same time.
I could really sense the emotion behind the words.
I enjoyed the repetition, it made the piece very powerful.
The flow was good throughout, and the ending was so beautiful, it brought tears to my eyes.

I loved how you repeated the first line in every stanza except the last one, and how it ended. WONDERFUL! But, once again capitalization and punctuation do help a bit. But, that's just my thoughts. :/

Great job on the poem,sad and deep,yet you did a good job, keep up the good work your friend Tracy 5/5

That is such a sad poem. isn't it amazing how much easier it is to say things in writing/

FANTASTIC work!!!

Josie

Amazing write!!....Beautifully penned peice of work!..and the repetition of the lines made the poem look powerful...all in all Nice work!...though sad!...Kp up de good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

I am in love with this poem. it's really good. and it is on my favorite poem list. thanks for commenting on my poems hun keep up the good work.

Your so talented