U BANDED ME B**CH F U TOO

Ok again a few lil mistakes-
But you don't go(i thought you wanted him to come save you? not go away?)
also i think there should be a break after this line.
Want to take the chance(break?)
of it(thi, not it.) being a trick,

i think the last to stanzas were very great. you do have talent and potential.. i can tell you love writing. =]

I don't get why you structure your poems the way you do. The content here is great, and there's something deeply spiritual in the words you've written here. But the flow from line to line is just way wide of the mark, and it spoils it. For me, at least. Some people like this jumpy, fractured style. Probably.

Very nice, but a sad one, another 5/5 from me, keep up the great job like always.

Amazing Poem
Like Someone Said, Gets You thining
5.5

Good job, the flow was off sometimes, though but overall a very nice, yet sad, poem. congrats

Parker

I know you're a bit older than some of the poets on here, and you do make small mistakes, but that's because you don't edit your work. I think you should, read what you have written, and see if the words you are using are correct. You are still a young poet, so keep writing, and you will get better.

This is an amazing poem!
freaked me out a lil lool
but i loved the way you used the words...
keep it up!

Powerful poem. You painted a clear image of being scared to face your fears and running away, then returning later to silence and realising your mistake. I like how you left the reasons up for interpretation, it allows the reader to apply it to their own "life" and it becomes more personal.
I think you have a typo on the second line of the last stanza, "hard" should be "heard".
Thanks for sharing.

I liked this, I found it very powerful.
I found the structure a little confusing, but apart from that, it was perfect, I loved it!

I think you did an alright job on here, it is not as good as some of your that i have read, but its not bad either. there are a few spelling errors, and the emtion felt a little dry to me.