by xxmichaelxx Nov 4, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
I imagine myself alone |
by Shae
Thats another really good poem. All of the ones I've wrote is how I feel or something that has acually happened in my life...anyways great job! |
Hey this was a good poem but it seemed incomplete...like it needed more. But it was still a great write, I liked it. I'm sorry I haven't commented in a long time, I'm so busy I rarely have time to get on here anymore...I missed your poetry. |
Hmm. This can definetely be improved. The flow is a little off because some of you lines are different lengths than the others. I also think it would benefit if you paid more attention to the rhyme scheme. Maybe use more less used rhymes.. Also, I think the descriptions could be improved. Add more detail in. Other than that, nice job. 4/5 |
by ForeverYoung
Hey, i like this poem of your alot. |