Hey, i like this poem of your alot.
Your rhymes are good but a little cliche.
Pay attention to your capital letters at the start of every new line. other than that, its great.
Keep it up, you have alot of potential.

4/5

~Murder.

Hmm. This can definetely be improved. The flow is a little off because some of you lines are different lengths than the others. I also think it would benefit if you paid more attention to the rhyme scheme. Maybe use more less used rhymes.. Also, I think the descriptions could be improved. Add more detail in. Other than that, nice job. 4/5

Hey this was a good poem but it seemed incomplete...like it needed more. But it was still a great write, I liked it. I'm sorry I haven't commented in a long time, I'm so busy I rarely have time to get on here anymore...I missed your poetry.
5.5
Breanna

Thats another really good poem. All of the ones I've wrote is how I feel or something that has acually happened in my life...anyways great job!