Hey this is great! i loved how you set this out.

i will read more. thanx for commenting on one of mine. lol. i will read some more. hope you do the same.

i gave you a 5 cause in my mind i thought this deserved a rate of excellent!

David

I like the thought pattern to this poem.
Great job!
Take Care Cindy

I luv the thought u put into this poem!!
nicely done:D
never stop writing:D
bree! tk care

This is a really nice poem, great effort and thought put into it

Wow, this piece is greatly written. You created very vivid imagery, and your choice of words is excellent. I like the form of the poem, too.
5/5 from me

This is another beautiful piece from you. There is still room for improvement but overall it is 5/5. do some work on the last line, it needs to be better. keep it up

tc
Fsams

Descriptive portraying a sad feeling nice work :)