A Tear Stained Body [Senryu]

by вℓєє∂ιиg.тєαяѕ ♥   Nov 4, 2006


Tears glide across cheeks
Destroying perfect makeup
Cutting into skin..

Pain fills her insides
Drowning a delicate heart
Black tears smother lungs..

Slowly collapsing
A tear stained body remains
From pain, she is freed..

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Senryu:

A Senryu has the same structure as a Haiku, (A poem with a syllable count of 5/7/5) but instead of the focus being on nature, it is on human emotions. This is usually only one stanza, but it may have more.

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  • 18 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    I can't believe how creative. You have such orignality. I have to have you in my favorites. Well done. 5/5 God Bless.

    ~*TAY*~

  • 18 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    5/5. I really liked it. You didnt put her, him, or they. You discribed it as everyone. Great poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammie

    For your first poem, that is amazing! I love how you used three Senryu's & made it one big poem. This poem seemed so deep, you used perfect descriptive words to put your message across. Keep it up hun, you have talent! =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 18 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    Did you just start writing, because WOW. I have read only 2 poems, and they are just breathtaking, so amazing, so much emotion. You have a wonderful skill.

  • 18 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    I thought this was written really well...it was worded really beautifully and im kinda just in a bit of an awe...it was like dazzaling..awesome job 5/5

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