by Ike Dizzle Nov 4, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
My turn |
I think you said 'you' a lot of times when you meant to say 'your', but maybe I'm wrong. It was an okay piece. I didn't like the one-word lines in stanzas one and two, as I felt they broke the flow. That's all I think. |
by Hebe
Very good poem, |
:-(.. It must be true to read this but very emotional to read every step of line which is possible it's real feelings. |
by Tia
0MGG!! G00D J0B!! 5/5!! |
by Gasttlee
Great work! 5/5 |