My first snow experience

This poem made me giggle. :) snow is so cool! I usually choose which stanzas/lines I like the best, but I can't even choose! AWESOME job. I really loved it.

Excellent,
5/5

This was a very nice poem, but some of the rhyming seemed forced and some things were not needed..like the part with the kitten and the part about it not being pricey....but thats just my opinion...the rest was very nicely assembled and descriptive...i could picture the image in my head.well done:)

You used really good descriptions in this which made great imagery. I've never seen snow, but i'm sure i'll be just as you were. A good write. Keep it up. =]

Tammie

Ok I liked the idea of someones first experience of snow, but they don't seem all that amazed and excited to say it's their first time...
First stanza: You start with the snow already laid on the ground, then later talk about the snowflakes falling. Personally I would have found it nice to read the poem starting with a first snowflake and the emotions you felt.
Second stanza: I love catching snowflakes on my tongue so I loved the image of this part. However, I felt the rhyming in this stanza somewhat cheesy and forced.
Stanza three: I own 4 cats and know how easily they can mistake you for other people even if you only change your coat. I loved the idea of the kitten questioning who you are because you're covered in snow.
Stanza four: This one was good as it showed you wondering if it was reality or not. I do think the first line would sound better "ice on the lake" as the water under the layer is still there.
Stanza five: The rose line shows it's early winter, hence the first snow, so this is a good way to back up the poems subject. I didn't understand in the last line why you're holding a pillow, maybe this was only used to rhyme and in which case this is not good.
Stanza six: Good exciting end (this is how the beginning should be). Good way to round off the poem, but I think it could have been shown a bit more in the poem as a whole, the happiness I mean.

Ok so overall a good poem. I just suggest if you were to edit it you add some more excitment to the beginning especially and check that the rhymes aren't forced.
Thanks for sharing.

I *love* it. It makes me want to jump in the snow as soon as we get an actual snow (more than 3 inches!). Excellent job. I could picture the whole thing as I read word to word. Keep it up.

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