What i like about the poem is that it flows really well.

but... it does not rhyme most of the time. the words are close to rhyming but dont acctually get the full affect.

but that is only my opinion, should not be taken as offence. none was attended.

a great poem anyway. very moving and a nice topic, in a weird way.

David

I enjoyed this, it was orignial in theme and concept, which is always nice.
I was kind of thrown of by it not rhyming, but the flow was excellent, and I enjoyed the wording and imagery.
I think you could make it better by making it rhyme a little, but other than that, excellent!

I really liked this one.It raises some pretty thought provoking questions which you answer in a rhetorical style that does not stilt the flow at all. You are correct that poems do not need to rhyme as these are called verse and it greatly annoys me to be expected to rhyme.
I think the title says it all really - just perfect.
Keep it up - there is real talent here

Well...theres not much wrong with it, but the since the title is "HOw Perfect" i think you should have gone into more depth about how perfect it would be instaed of saying what an adventure it would be..cause you only slightlky touched on the perfection of death...or just rename it..lol...i liked the way it flowed with an effortless style...nicley done:)

Death; oh what a joy that would be.
To be gone in a world of my own.
To not feel pain any longer.
To just be there in His gentle hands.

yea, i often think about this...not that its constantly on my mind, kinda thing, but ever once in a while, i just wonder....
anyways, the poem...you did a really good job on this, because most poems are like 'oh, i wanna die' if they're talking about death, but this one has that sad feeling to it, but its also kind of just curiosity and its even somewhat positive.... it makes you wonder but not get depressed...a very rare find..you did a great job on this!5/5

Good job, I will admit it's not as good as your other one. I liked the questioning voice in this poem. It was creative. The words were a bit repetitive and simple. Still, nice poem overall.

Really good poem "hands ya a 5" AWESOME NESS xDD

Hmmmm
half of my poems don't rhyme, and i understand you chose to have this one not rhyme, but i think it would flow so much better with rhyme.
i really like how you used personification with death, and how you referred to it as "him".
i also like how you use "shall", being very proper, and then in the next line you use :"'Cause", very interesting, and very different.
another tip, you wrote "To look upon Earth from above,", maybe you should put "To look down upon", it gives me the idea your looking at it from above.
hopefully i helped you improve.

"Death would be an awful good adventure."
this was my favorite line, but it's from Peter Pan!! sorry i got excited, i love that movie. but perter pan said "death, would be an awful big adventure!"
ok, i'm done.
anyways, nice job, just take what i said into mind, and hopefully it helped you for the better. looks like you hit a home run, 5;5

Wow very differnt, flows well, and great structure, liked ur use if words, the rhyming got me a bit, but that makes it more unique i guess, i like how u had the guts to try something differnt...

I really enjoyed this. For me, the rhyming or non-rhyming of a poem isn't what draws me into it, it's the whole context, the subject of the poem itself.

Your poem was very interesting, it give a positive outlook on a somewhat morbid subject (to some people). It was an interesting read. I don't have anything to critisize, I would say it was too short, but it wasn't in the least bit short at all... I just wanted to read more. =P

Good job.

Hmm, this was good. I found it a little confusing as some of your ideas were not put across very clearly. The flow was good although I do think it could be improved with a rhyme scheme. The descriptions were also good, but you kept reapeating yourself.. I was looking for some new ideas in there aswell. Other than that, nice job 5/5

I do not like your word usage in it... I believe you could have described things better.. And some of the lines are akwardly longer than others.
Otherwise, it is well thought out and rather interesting.. Though, about death like every other poem on this site. However, you handled a cliche topic pretty nicely. Good job

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Truly a great poem, with perfect meaning, vocab, and imagenary......
it was a deep poem, and as true poets know, poetry is not about rhyming, what you have in this poem is emotion which made this poem one of the best poem here in this site, 5/5 from me.....

I really liked this .
It`s really meaningful and the flow was fine .
Not perfect but it worked .
And whoever downvotes because it isn`t rhyming is retarded-.-
Anyways, this was a deep and well written poem .
Well done .
..ღ__MiNDYY

This is a very deep, and emotional poem. But at the same time a very good one too! It had alot of imagry in it. Very well done. 5/5

*~Tay~*

Very well done this poem has deep words used never change ur writing style i love it!

I used to be a lover of rhyming poems, but I've learned to have a thing for free verse. Your poem astounds me by the feelings within it and the diction you chose to write it with, excellent. I'd give it 4 out of 5. =)

I love the idea of this poem. *grin* thought provoking!

some flow was out, but whos perfect?? =)

this is sad and happy at the same time.. not one i'm gonna forget quickly.

keep writing!
xx

Even though like you said this poem doesn't rhyme it's still a great read. It's true that death doesn't make mistakes and we all have to die sooner or later. The poem was written very well and I enjoyed it great job 5/5

I actually prefer unrhyming poems. Sometimes trying to make something rhyme really takes away from the deep meaning of the poem. Sometimes i wonder what it would be like to die, just because I want to know what people would say after I left. Good job