by emmerz Nov 7, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
new love
She took a chance and made a move |
by Bridgette
I really like the story behind this one.. it's very sweet. The only problem I saw with this was the third line of the last stanza. It's much longer than the rest of the lines and reads kind of awkward, I think that it would work much better if you took off "and disappointment." that way, the flow would be much better and you'd still get your point across to the reader. Other than that, the flow was really good and held up well. Great job on this! 5/5 Keep it up! |
Awwe this is cute!!! =] thanx for the comment aswell!! |
That was truly awesome i love it |
by Anonymous
This poem is very cute, but I kind of saw the ending come. However, word choice, flow, and imagery OWN in this poem. I bestow you a 5/5. |
Love it love it love it!! i think it is so cute when best friends grow into more!! keep writing!! |