Short yet very powerful.
It had a good opening and you ended it well.
5/5
*Gem*

Short, sweet, and great. This seems to me like one of those childhood hymnals you'd memorize in church..except it's depressing. pretty good nonetheless though ;)

As for my poem, I release my own emotions when I write. I don't care what people learn when I write, as long as I'm venting my emotion. That was written during one of my 'dark' periods..so yes, it was from my own depression.

Again, great job on this. keep it up ;)