Shhh. Shhh. Hello me.

Ha, I loved that!

"The grey clouds over london hardly make a pleasant view
Council houses daubed in paint, and the supermarkets too
Theres a lady sitting next to me, looking at The Sun
I can just read from the back page that bloody chelsea won"

That stanza was my favourite. I like how you put humour into your writing to make it more entertaining. Just a few grammatical mistakes, and punctuation, but overall it was a really great write.

Oh shit! We are, oh bloody hell, I'll have to hurry up
Zip up my bag, Grab my coat, leave my empty cup
The seat exhales its dust cloud as I clamber off the train
Four days visiting Grandad, Then I'll be on the train again
^^^^
I can really picture you saying this Katie......lol...I can even see the look on your face.
" Oh shit! We are, oh bloody hell "

Even with my eyes out of whack and a banging headache you manage to make me laugh dear Katie.

You have brightened my night with your creative humour !
Well done Katie !