by Carmen Nov 7, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
God, please forgive me. |
I like it . It`s honest . Loving, but cold at the same time . The rhyming was okay, at points it kind of killed my flow while reading this . The lines being long and short meshing together didn`t work too great for me, BUT i still think it was pretty good . |
by Melpomene
I liked this poem it was really sad and dark. Your ryhme was good. Your last stanza was definitly the best even though i thought it should of had the same number of lines as the other stanzas. Well done none the less on this poem. A Great poem~mel |
Whoa... |
by Letty
This is a very nice poem. I think that you done an outstanding job. I love the message that you convey with this poem. The flow of it was ok and so was the rhyming. I think that it is great that you can admit to you mistakes and ask for forgiveness. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I am looking forward to reading more. 5/5 Keep up the great work. |
by Bridgette
I really like this poem.. It's so honest and true to your feelings. The last stanza was very well done and it worked very well with the poem. I love how you did each family member and apologized and explained why you were apologizing. Great job on this! 5/5 |