by lonely princess Nov 7, 2006
category :
Friendship, family /
best friends
If i could tell you my dream, would you listen? |
This is a very touching and heartfelt piece. It definitely captures the emotion and loss for someone dear. As far as changing anything, you may wish to play around with the line breaks/stanzas to put more emphasis on the more powerful phrases/sections, perhaps make the final line a statement rather than a question, but that is up to you. Again, a very touching piece. |